User:Mayajstokes/Red Rock Canyon National Conservation Area/Pago240 Peer Review

General info
(provide Mayajstokes)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Mayajstokes/Red Rock Canyon National Conservation Area
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Red Rock Canyon National Conservation Area
 * Red Rock Canyon National Conservation Area

Evaluate the drafted changes
Based on your draft, I considered the 'bold’ and ‘italicized’ type as your contribution to the article. Your contributions improve upon the information in the article by adding interesting facts about the Red Rock Canyon National Conservation Area. There are a few opportunities where I think you could improve your article contributions. In the lead, where you’ve added the fact that it was Nevada’s first conservation area, I think it would be great to add the year it was designated. Where you mention, ‘Water is key to the history of the area,’ its importance to plant and animal species is noted, but perhaps you could elaborate on whether it was a factor that contributed to the native groups that occupied the area. Also, in the same paragraph, I believe there is a typo where you’ve used ‘catchment basements’ instead of ‘catchment basins.’ Lastly, and I don’t know if this is just a feature of the ‘drafts’ page, but I did not notice any citations. Overall, I found your additions made the article more interesting and informative.