User:Mayapalikuca/Travel/Wigginsa235 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mayapalikuca


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mayapalikuca/Travel?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Travel

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:
N/A

Content:
I think that the content you added is relevant to the topic! The only thing that I feel shouldn't be added is the "reduce stress" bullet point because the article already has "Relaxation" as a point. You would just be restating something already said and you can infer that when you feel relaxed, you aren't stressed out. Hopefully that makes sense. Overall, I think that maybe you should come up with 1-2 more bullet points for the purpose/motivation of travel and also just keep looking at other sections, double check if there needs to be more information there. Also, since the fact sheet has statistics, maybe make it more about the different generations such as "19% of millennials believe that traveling is best for making memories." Then compare it to the other generations. Does this make sense? The content is up to date as I can see it is from 2018.

Tone and Balance:
I believe that the content you added is neutral. There are no claims you made that are heavily biased. I don't think anything is underrepresented or over represented either. Overall, the content you added won't persuade anyone to a specific position. I mean, it could make people want to travel, but it isn't biased information.

Sources and References:
Your content is backed up by secondary sources. It also reflects with what the sources are talking about. Your sources are thorough and current! I don't see an author so I am not sure if your sources use a variety of authors. Your links do work! Another source to consider using is National Geographic. I found an article that could help give you some more information to add for the purpose of traveling.

https://www.nationalgeographic.com/travel/article/why-travel-should-be-considered-an-essential-human-activity

"Travel entails wishful thinking. It demands a leap of faith, and of imagination, to board a plane for some faraway land, hoping, wishing, for a taste of the ineffable."

That is one piece of information you could change and use for your article!

Organization:
I feel that the content you added is clear, I can understand it well. It is broken down well and you have no grammar or spelling errors.

Images and Media:
N/A

Overall Impressions:
I think that articles are always more complete when even just one more piece of information is added. You have done that, but there could be more! Also, like I stated before, I feel that the point about reducing stress doesn't need to be in there since it is inferred with relaxation. But, that is up to you, this is just my opinion! I think that making memories is a strong piece of information so great job on adding that! Again, if you add more content and maybe even consider using the percentages in those fact sheets, your article could be even better! Hope this all helps!!