User:Mayor1704/Maternal death/Studenteditor03 Peer Review

General info
Mayor1704
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Mayor1704/Maternal death
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Maternal death

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:

I don't think you need to change the lead based on the addition of the citation. The lead is very detailed and goes into a good in-depth analysis of what material death is as well as some brief statistics on the topic. The lead doesn't explicitly say exactly what the article will talk about word for work, however, it does give an idea of possible topics, like prevention and measurements. The lead isn't overly detailed, it just provides a good background on what the writer will continue to go into more depth with in the rest of the article.

Content:

The content being added is very relevant, the editor chose to add information from 2020 to present. This keeps the article up to date and more efficient when using it for work. The sections all include citations to the lines in which the information came from an outside source. I feel, maybe if there are some lines without this information, they could possible find a citation to make it more connected to other data. This article works to bridge the gap that exists between women's health and reproductive rights. Th editor above, works to also connect it to improving the gap of Black maternal care.

Tone/Balance:

The overall tone of the article is neutral. There are no added lines that attempt to sway ones opinion one way or the other. It works to maintain this neutrality by including statistics and citing sources so individuals know where to look for more information. It references mothers from all over the world and different ways each community is and can work to prevent maternal death.

Sources and References:

This editor was using different sources the found to annotate and add credibility to the article. From the basis of the 3 article used, I like how they all came from 2020-present, meaning the information being added is extremely relevant. The first source, is a peer-review journal with figures and background research. It backs up the articles point about there being a recent rise, particularly in Black mother mortality rate, within the Unites States. This source is also used a second time, helping to relate preexisting conditions to the effects of death, which tend to not be taken into consideration. This once again can be found in the article and is backed up by statistics. The second source, once again is discussing maternal death in the United States. This article provides lots of helpful charts which are good when backing a neutral stance Wikipedia article. The connection is linked to when the Wiki page discusses the effects of Covid on the rates, the stats can be found in the charts. The sources used are published by authors of various races, ganders, and ethnicity helping to create a more neutral and trusting information.

Organization:

The article is organized, making reading easy. it starts with the lead, as mentioned before, which helps give background to the topic of maternal death. It then breaks down the causes, which is the most important information to have first when going into a new topic. It then has smaller subsection that explain these causes, for example unsafe abortions. The next section is discussing tends that can be seen when looking at data about the death rates. The next section is discussing prevention. Just like the first section, this breaks further down into subsections addressing how we can work to prevent maternal death, for example public health reforms. Finally, it provides statistics in a section titled epidemiology, which breaks down the statistics regarding the topic all over the world. From reading the article, it is an easy read that is clear with no grammatical errors.

Images and Media:

There are 5 images with in the article. There are three that specifically stick out to me as helpful. One being an infographic about maternal mortality rate in India, which directly correlates with the section rates. This helps to show numbers but in an intestine and interactive diagram, which is more exciting than reading. The second image is if a women, who created a maternal health program in African. It is interesting to look at someone who has influenced and made a significant change the community. Finally, the most helpful diagram is the one of the world map. This clearly demonstets the rates of mortality using colors. This final diagram could be updates being that it is from 2015. Also, there could be a little bit more of an inclusion to the descriptions underneath. They are lacking and not informative.