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Practice Editing Here (Nov 15th in-class Wiki session work)

 * This is a place to practice clicking the "edit" button and practice adding references (via the citation button).

Task:


 * 1) Find a peer-reviewed journal article on PubMed. Practice inserting your citation in the above space using the "cite" tool
 * 2) Choose one "B-level" medical article on Wikipedia from the following list: https://wp1.openzim.org/#/project/Medicine/articles?quality=B-Class&importance=High-Class
 * 3) Practice editing live on Wikipedia by finding a typo in the text or improving the clarity/readability of a sentence by adjusting a few words in a sentence.



Assignment # 3- please post an anonymous copy here!
Proposed Changes.

Our proposed changes are as such:

The original sentence was “Based on death certificates, sudden cardiac death accounts for about 15% of all deaths in Western countries.” This will be changed to “Based on death certificates, sudden cardiac death accounts for about 20% of all deaths in the United States.” This updates the source, as it is more current, and provides context into specifically what the Western nations are. Additionally, we will add a sentence to give a more global context of the incidence of sudden cardiac death: “Non-Western regions of the world have differing incidences. The incidence of sudden cardiac death in the United States is 110.8 per 100,000, while China is 41.8 per 100,000 and South India is 39.7 per 100,000.”

Rationale for proposed change.

We made 2 specific changes. The reasoning for this was to update the mortality rate of sudden cardiac death in the United States in the first sentence, as the original source was from 1998 while the new source covers the range of 2005-2015, thus much more current. Secondly, we wanted to provide a non-ethnocentric viewpoint of sudden cardiac death, as cardiac arrest happens globally and cardiac disease varies according to diet, culture, lifestyle, and region. Thus, we found a review that discusses global incidence of cardiac death and thus used that to compare US sudden cardiac death incidence to large non-Western nations like India and China. These 3 countries have vastly different diets, populations, histories, and lifestyles, so we believe it can be a good comparison.

Controversy is limited, however, the data regarding incidence of sudden cardiac death in South India is limited to adults at or over 35 years old. This can mask the true incidence of sudden cardiac death and thus may not be perfectly accurate. However, this is the only article referencing South Asia, which is an exceptionally dense population and has a drastically different lifestyle compared to the Western world and thus we decided it was a good comparison as it may be relevant for a global perspective on sudden cardiac death.

Critique of Sources.

One source of concern that may be prevalent was the differing relevancies of each article used within the systematic review. While each article is fairly relevant for each year, each region had a different study period, and each finished at different times. For example, the South India study spanned two years, from January 1st, 2010, to December 31st, 2011, whereas the US study spanned from 2005 to 2015, thus having a wider range of data and was completed more recently. Thus, it is more current. We still decided to include all three of these papers as they were thorough, investigated a wide range of people, and all used the same methodology of assessment of death certificates. Finally, it was used in the systematic review we are using for comparison purposes and passed peer-review, so by extension we felt it was appropriate to compare them as well.

Part 5: Talk Page Submission

In this assignment, we are aiming to update some critical information to some statistics along with adding in a multinational perspective rather than focusing on an ethnocentric, US only perspective. To do this, we are aiming to update the first sentence, as it is an older source, with a more modern source. Currently US sudden cardiac deaths make up 20% of deaths, rather than the older source which is 15%. Secondly, we will add the incidence rates of sudden cardiac death for the US and compare it to South India and China, which represent two very different cultures, lifestyles, and populations and thus can give good global insight. The incidence of sudden cardiac death in the United States is 110.8 per 100,000, while China is 41.8 per 100,000 and South India is 39.7 per 100,000.

What to post on the Wikipedia article talk page (part of assignment 3)

 * This will also be covered on Nov 15th in class. Your group should use the below template to share an outline of your proposed improvements (including your new wording and citations). Article talk pages are not places to share your assignment answers. The Wikipedia community will be more interested in viewing your exact article improvement suggestions including where you plan to improve the article (which section), what wording you suggest, and the exact citation (Note: all citations must meet WP:MEDRS)
 * You will not be able to paste citations directly from your sandbox to talk pages (unless you are interested in editing/learning Wiki-code in the "source editing" mode). We suggest re-adding your citations on the talk page manually (using the cite button and populating the citation by pasting in the DOI, website, or PMID). You will have to repeat this process yet again when you edit the actual article live.
 * Talk Page Template: CARL Medical Editing Initiative/Fall 2021/Talk Page Template