User:Mbdougl/May-Britt Moser/Tigers125 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Mbdougl
 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * May-Britt Moser

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Lead evaluation
The Lead already included an adequate overview of the information added. The introductory sentence explains briefly what her topic of research is and where she teaches. The Lead summarizes her important research and a little about her background. It does not appear to include anything that is not present in the article. The Lead is not overly detailed, but is a nice summary of the article.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

Content evaluation
The editor mainly added more to the background of the article. More recent information was added about the personal life of Moser and what she did before she became renowned. As i can see, all of the content that was added is relevant to the article. Before the addition, not much was present about Moser's early life. The new content gives more information into what Moser was like and what she did before she began her important research.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Tone and balance evaluation
The content added gives more content about the studies of Moser and more details about what she studied before her notable studies. The only information that could be seen as biased are Moser's personal thoughts that are included. However, none of the new information takes a heavy position on any topic. It gives more background to the reasons leading up to the divorce of Moser and her husband, not just a statement that it happened.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Sources and references evaluation
The editor added sources to back up all the information added. The sources are new and relevant to the information provided. All of the links I tried worked and traveled to the appropriate sites.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Organization evaluation
Most of the information added is clear and easy to read, though a few sentences are more dense or overly detailed. No grammar or spelling errors can be seen in the information added by the editor. The personal content that was added was broken into paragraphs by topic of information.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?

Overall evaluation
The personal information that was added by the editor has improved this section of the Moser article by giving more relevance to the information and expanding on ideas that were briefly mentioned. The content gave background to why Moser did certain things, like the events that led to Moser and her husband's divorce. The improvements that I recommend are changing the personal thoughts that are included from Moser. It would be less opinionated if these thoughts were not included.