User:Mbh90/Transgenerational trauma/KatherineModrall Peer Review

Peer Review: Transgenerational Trauma

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Derek Tran (Dct53) and Megan Huynh (Mbh90)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Transgenerational Trauma Sandbox
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Transgenerational Trauma

Evaluate the drafted changes
Strengths of the Article Revisions

Overall, I found the Transgenerational Trauma edits to the Refugees section to be very well written and eloquent. I think the section written under the Refugees section does a great job covering broadly the variety of different reasons that refugees experience transgenerational trauma including having to migrate to a new country, learn a new language, a disruption of typical caregiving, and inadequate mental health support. I think renaming the subsection "Vietnam War Refugees" from the original subsection title of "Cambodians" was a great improvement since the section talks about refugees from Vietnam, Cambodia, Thailand, and Laos! Your additions to the Vietnam War Refugees section on how the limited social mobility and exposure to trauma in Vietnamese Americans impacted the way that they raised their children which led to intergenerational trauma. I think that statistic from the 2013 study regarding Khmer Rouge survivors with PTSD is very impactful and encompasses the intergenerational trauma that occurred in Cambodian refugees.

Suggested Changes:

I think some of the sources from the "Refugees" section were left out, but I am sure this was just a result of copying and pasting into the sandbox (ie: the 2013 study did not have a citation). I think the addition of a statistic to support the final claim in the "Refugees section" regarding how children of refugees had higher levels of mental illnesses could make the claim even stronger. You could also include information about refugees from Thailand and Laos specifically in addition to your sections on Vietnam and Cambodia. Overall, I think the biggest improvement to your revisions would be to continue to add secondary sources to support your claims along with adding citations of those sources, but you guys have done a wonderful job thus far.