User:Mbh90/Transgenerational trauma/Tikomkheidze Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

user:Mbh90


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mbh90/Transgenerational_trauma?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Transgenerational trauma

Evaluate the drafted changes
After comparing and contrasting the original with your version, I think you guys overall did a great job! I really liked how you guys expanded the subsection, to be more inclusive (which I think was a necessary addition). It is much more informative than the original. The only critique I have is to add a couple of citations into the second paragraph. I see that it was just the original paragraph woven in, but I feel like adding citations might help out a little bit (to make up for what the original author forgot).

Original

Since 1975, the US has accepted many refugees from Vietnam, Cambodia, Thailand, and Laos. While majority of these groups were fleeing war and poverty, Cambodian refugees were also fleeing a genocide from the Khmer Rouge. The atrocities of violence, starvation and torture were common themes experienced by these refugees. Many Cambodian refugee families refused to talk about their trauma creating an isolating environment for the child. This led to a transmission of trauma and through the continuing pattern of silence and refusal to acknowledge an issue or seek treatment. There has also been data showing that the children of survivors from regions with higher rates of violence and mortality displayed stronger overall symptoms. Parenting style of caregivers may also contribute to the rate of impact among children of Khmer Rouge survivors. A 2013 study found that among Khmer Rouge survivors with PTSD who engage in role-reversal parenting, a form of parenting where the parent looks to the child for emotional support, there may be higher rates of anxiety and depression in the children.

Revised

Since 1975, the US has accepted many refugees from Vietnam, Cambodia, Thailand, and Laos. As a result of the Vietnam War, many of these Southeast Asian refugees are at high risk of experiencing transgenerational trauma. Factors occurring both before and after immigration to America could contribute to traumatization in these groups. Being forced to witness and flee violence and war were uniquely traumatic occurrences, resulting in high levels of psychological distress. Upon arriving in the United States, Vietnamese Americans struggled to adapt to their new environment, resulting in limited social mobility, high rates of poverty within the community, and exposure to community violence, and exposure to these stressors are correlated with higher trauma symptoms within these refugees and first-generation Vietnamese Americans. In turn, the traumatic experiences faced by these refugees impacted the ways in which they raised their children, as they internalized notions of being outsiders in a new country and placed high value upon success in the face of their many sacrifices. This cultural and familial transmission of trauma has led to second-generation Vietnamese Americans to face their own forms of intergenerational trauma, leading to unique forms of mental health and stress not often addressed due to socio-cultural standards of silence and refusal to seek treatment.

While majority of these groups were fleeing war and poverty, Cambodian refugees were also fleeing a genocide from the Khmer Rouge. The atrocities of violence, starvation and torture were common themes experienced by these refugees. Many Cambodian refugee families refused to talk about their trauma creating an isolating environment for the child. This led to a transmission of trauma and through the continuing pattern of silence and refusal to acknowledge an issue or seek treatment. There has also been data showing that the children of survivors from regions with higher rates of violence and mortality displayed stronger overall symptoms. Parenting style of caregivers may also contribute to the rate of impact among children of Khmer Rouge survivors. A 2013 study found that among Khmer Rouge survivors with PTSD who engage in role-reversal parenting, a form of parenting where the parent looks to the child for emotional support, there may be higher rates of anxiety and depression in the children.