User:Mbjones00/Jane Eyre/JhanysG Peer Review

General info
User:Mbjones00
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:DRAFT
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Jane Eyre

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Marissa! Overall wonderful additions! I take it the "Genre" heading will incorporate the current article's "Romance Genre" Heading as a subheading? Great idea!

Lead


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Will you be making any edits to the Lead section to accommodate your additions? I see that the Bildungsroman and social class aspects are already included in the Lead, but I could see you being able to squeeze a mention of the gothic genre into the Lead after or along with the final line about it being one of the most widely recognized romances.

Content


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Definitely! You have added things that expand on topics already mentioned in the Lead of the article, and by discussing genre and themes you are engaging with two of the most important parts of a novel.
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Hard to say with this one. With older books that don't have a
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * None to note.
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?
 * I would say yes; you are adding to a page about a female author, and your edits also touch on topics like social class and inequity within the novel.

Tone and Balance


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * For the most part, you do a really good job at making sure things stay neutral. I have included the rare instance of when that tone is broken:
 * "The Gothic genre uses the Gothic double a literary motif, which is described as the protagonist having a double, alter ego, or doppelganger best interpreted between Jane Eyre and Bertha Mason, where Bertha represents the other side of Jane and vice versa."
 * I would avoid using words like "best" because it is difficult to quantify, especially with something like an interpretation of a novel.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * If anything, in the "Gothic Genre" I would offer up more verifiable examples of the Gothic Double motif since you cover this topic in a line and the homodiegetic aspect of the novel's narration receives an entire paragraph. Granted, there may not be any other significant doubles in the novel (or, at least, none with literature written about them), and if that is the case this can be ignored.

Sources and References


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Yes; everything that warrants a citation is accompanied by one.


 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Yes; they reflect the available literature, and they do so by taking into account what literature has already been used for the current article. Considering how robust the current list is already, this is quite the feat.
 * Are the sources current?
 * Most have been published within the last 20 or so years, so they are very current, but more importantly the age of the source doesn't matter so much with a topic like this; your older sources hold no issues for the content they are discussing, as the content referenced has not changed/new information has not come out about it to make the ideas or arguments outdated.
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
 * Hard to tell. From what I could find through searching the authors, it seems as though the group is diverse, but it's difficult to verify the identities of the authors.
 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites?
 * N/A. All or most of the articles appear to be scholarly and peer-reviewed.

Organization


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Yes! Aside from a few grammar/spelling errors listed below, there is nothing ill to note. You write clearly and concisely, and you convey what needs to be conveyed to offer the reader the understanding they need.


 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * Yes, everything in its section has a clear reason for being there, and there is nothing in a section that I would move out into parts of what already exist, take out completely, or move to a different section you have created.

Overall impressions


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?/How can the content added be improved?
 * I would say it has; notably, this fills a bit gap in the Romance Genre section, as Jane Eyre is much more than just a romance novel. This provides evidence for that and further fleshes out the work.
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * See above.

Additional Questions


 * Does your peer have 5-7 reliable sources?
 * Yes!
 * Does the topic link in some way to our course material?
 * Definitely! Nothing quite as relevant as one of our course readings!
 * Does your peer add historical context to their article?
 * No, but I cannot think of anywhere where historical context would be needed aside from explaining what other gothic genre and Bildungsroman novels existed at the time, but I'm not sure if that would be relevant or useful information or not.
 * Based on what you know from course content, what do you think Wikipedia users should know about this topic? In other words, what would you recommend adding and/or considering further?
 * Nothing to note.

Edits:


 * "In Jane Eyre, the Gothic conventions are used to emphasize how the intense emotions and reactions to Gothic conventions can solely exist in the protagonist's imagination and sometimes what a protagonist interprets to be there imagination turns into reality."
 * "...Jane feels fear towards being punished in the red room because she believes and images that her dead uncle haunts the room."
 * "The Gothic genre uses the Gothic double(add :) a literary motif, which is described..."
 * "By including the reader, Gothic novels allow readers to feel emotionally connected to the novel's content and its characters."
 * "As a narrator, Jane Eyre embodies this technique throughout the entire novel..."
 * homodiegetic doesn't have a wiki page for helpful explanation, but perhaps you could find another way to explain it within your text?
 * "The Genre Genre allows there to be a complex consideration of who or what hinders Jane's happiness."
 * I'm not 100% sure on this one, but I believe almost all of the occurrences of the word "bildungsroman" should have an "a" in front of them, as the Lead of the article has it written that way.
 * "Jane's search for life and understanding life goes beyond her romantic journey." This sentence may need to be reworded, as the use of "life and understanding life" is slightly repetitive and confusing.
 * "Throughout the novel, Jane goes various social class transitions."
 * "...with St. John, b B ut due to the circumstance of her situation..."
 * "and her inheritance offers a different form of independency (suggested edit: independence)."

-Jhanys