User:Mblucas/Tyrone Hayes/Iscucchi Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mblucas


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mblucas/Tyrone_Hayes?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Tyrone Hayes

Evaluate the drafted changes
I like that you have expanded upon the controversies that are known about Tyrone Hayes, I believe that you're off to a great start.

I think it would be beneficial if the section regarding workplace misconduct provided further evidence of the allegations against him and explicitly stated what those allegations are.

There are a few grammar and spelling errors in this portion. "One study was conducted in Germany while the other was conducted in the Maryland, USA. The EPA has been unsuccessful in replicating his results after numerous trails were performed." "The" before Maryland should be removed, ,as well as "trails" being changed to "trials."

I also noticed the advocacy section of the main article seems to be slightly outdated, as the most recent topic is from 2014. If there are any new advocacy ventures for Hayes, I feel it could be beneficial to include those as well.