User:Mblucas/Tyrone Hayes/Kmb24 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mblucas


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Editing User:Mblucas/Tyrone Hayes - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Tyrone Hayes - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
The addition of a "controversies" section looks great. I think all of the sections could be more properly cited. There is a lot of information that includes no citations. Since it is not general knowledge being stated, there really needs to be a lot more citations. Additionally, I feel like the last sentence in the "Data Discrepancies" section is unnecessary and a little persuasive. This article should just contain facts about Tyrone Hayes, it should not suggest that it is suspicious that he has not shared his data with the EPA. Mentioning what reputable scientists do has nothing to do with the facts of his life. Other than that, it appears the edits are off to a good start.