User:Mblucas/Tyrone Hayes/Trillmc Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username)Mblucas


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mblucas/Tyrone_Hayes?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * I'm not sure

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead is good but could be improved a lot in my opinion. I definitely love how you all discussed his college life and what he researched. However, I believe there is a way that you can add more about his childhood/upbringing.