User:Mbluek/Parental leave/Bb1822 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mbluek


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mbluek/Parental_leave?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Parental leave

Evaluate the drafted changes
I thought this was well done, but could use more sources and examples.

Here are a few sentences that can be edited:


 * "the usage of paid maternity leave is drastically lower among Black and Hispanic mothers", is the usage of paid maternity leave lower or the access to maternity leave? Or both? The way this is worded it seems like they have access, but just don't use it
 * "due to structural factors including racial and ethnic discrimination in the workforce", it may be useful to list an example of one of the structural factors here to better illustrate this point
 * "lack of the financial resources needed to be able to afford taking parental leave", did you mean to say unpaid parental leave here?