User:Mbour181/History of dance/Emmareside Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mbour181


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mbour181/History_of_dance


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * History of Dance

Evaluate the drafted changes
In the draft there is no contribution to the lead to reflect the content added. This may be because it is in the early stages but may be useful in the future. The content added is relevant to the topic. There is nothing missing other than the lead addition. Nothing added seems to not belong and to not be cohesive with the article. The article does not deal with one of Wikipedias equity gaps.

The content added is neutral and doesn't seem to lean towards any bias. There aren't any viewpoints that are over or underrepresented. The content so far represents what the sources say but, again it is in the early stages, therefore, there is room to add more. The sources are thorough and there are many of them. They did a good job at gathering and finding sources. The sources are current and include a diverse spectrum of authors. From checking a few links, they work and send me to the relevant articles.

The content added is written okay but can be slightly more formal. They are going in the right direction. The writing is concise and easy to read. There are no grammar or spelling errors. The contents information is well sectioned off and organized.

The content does improve the quality of the article. The strength of the content added is that it provides relevant and relatable information. For example, the mentioning of Dancing With The Stars exhibited that. The content added can be written more formally yet is very good so far.

Good job!!