User:Mbrighton3/1980 Damascus Titan missile explosion/Pringlesandluffy Peer Review

In review on the for the Damascus Titan missile explosion, this article is a summary on the 1980 Titan II missile explosion. In the leading sentence and introductory overview section, the editor did a well job in doing a quick summary of the incident that occurred however, in this introduction more background on the location, the type of storage of the missile and that the military, specifically the United States Air Force was at the control of these missiles handling and maintenance. The sources provided in this introductory is well though. There are good areas to place a cursor over certain areas to get a quick summary from the areas of possibly needed cited areas for more information. There are parts that could of dove deeper into the history such as the second paragraph. This sentence only gives a very quick summary for the timing of the accident and that the missile landed close by without the radioactive material loss. Now this part alone could have dove slightly more, this was too fast and too quick on the overview not enough time as a reader to full digest and understand the events of the explosion. Leading into the Incident section, the leading up to the incident specifically. To start off, one thing of dislike is that the writer immediately starts when the airmen are going to work on the Titan II missile. There could have been more background on the facility layout the type of work that normally went into it and normal protocol. Starting off like this just doesn’t start off right and doesn’t lead into the issue at hand right. Next there is talk on the evacuation, but not much on what they did at the site to mitigate the size of the explosion that could that place at the site. Things that were done right in this sub section were proper highlighting of words to be able to know what certain unknown topics or words were. As well as keeping the time from from the start of the maintenance to the evacuation well with times and as well as naming key personnel in the effort to attempt to save the launch complex. Headed into the explosion subsection, this section highlights specifically the part where the hypergolic fuel exploded in the silo causing the Titan II explosion. The ranks in this section did not necessarily need to be highlighted to see the meaning of them, it was a pretty useless part in this section whereas the names of those whose ranks were highlighted could have been. Again, in this section there is no mention of the efforts fully taken to try to minimalize the blast other than turning on an exhaust fan. Would be beneficial to know the safety features prevented a way worse off disaster. However, this section does a nice job of going the sequence of events that was the explosion. In the subsection of the aftermath, this goes over exactly what went down after the explosion and leak. The section on Kennedy in the last sentence was quite short and wasn’t very clear on why, would have been nice to have dove maybe one more sentence into in as well. Also, would have been well to note how Titan missile were dismantled from 1982 to 1987, as this could be a key factor in an aftermath, though not directedly correlated a good factor in the Titan II. The Air Force’s cleanup of the site would have been a better place to fully go into as well, as this was barely touched on but was a part of the clean-up. This subsection was not fully completed so touching on it all the way would not be right as the last sentence is still being completed. However, some highlighting of key areas would have been good to add into. This section was a stronger one with more statistics on dollars amounts, and how much cleaning up was done for the clean-up which was a favorite. The citation in this article overall seems well balanced. In fact, they used one that would have been recommended. However, the citation needs to be added to the areas that they are being used to. Like if a citation is applicable more to one area maybe adding it to the heading of that section would be beneficial so the reading could go to the article and read more back that specific area. One thing that is favorable is the popular culture and the see also section which include other incidents that are similar and media that relates to this disaster in the culture section. Overall, this article had its ups and downs, with a few more changes this article can be better.