User:Mbstjohn/Onnie Lee Logan/Sbondurant Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mbstjohn


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Onnie Lee Logan


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Onnie Lee Logan

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: Your lead sets a good tone for the rest of the wiki page and I am able to clearly understand what is about to talked about. Your intro sentence is good and tells me about the person you are describing. All this info is presented in the body as well.

Article: You had clear organization of headings and subheadings, as well as appropriate transition. However, there are a few grammar mistakes, but they are not terribly noticeable. Also, in "early life" there are some repetitive sentences about her parents. There are a few times where you mention her mom was a farmer and midwife pretty close to each other. The content is good; there is all relevant info throughout. It is balanced and shows no sides, it is very neutral!

Referenes: your sources are easily associated with supporting references. your sources are also good, reliable ones and your reference section looks to be completed.

A few things to touch on: re-read through the sections and find any repetitive sentences and change them up a little so that they are not repetitive. If you can find anything on that one child she lost, that could be some new info to include, or maybe even a little about what she did when she was old, or if there are any newspaper articles about her from Alabama. Overall, great article! Just watch for grammar and repetitiveness!