User:Mbuyer2/Sani ol molk/Melinasr Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mbuyer2


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Abu'l-Hasan


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sani ol molk

Lead

 * Great expansion on the lead section!
 * Maybe consider removing the sentence "Scholars are not certain why he went to Italy to study, but there are several theories." from the intro, just because it doesn't add a lot to the chronology of his life that you do in the rest of the lead and because you expand on that later!

Content

 * I know there might be a bit of a resource scarcity, but I would love to see more in the career section. Maybe you could split off some of the stuff that's in the education section?
 * There's some unnecessary remarks in here that I think I enjoy, but I'm not sure Wikipedia would. Like in the education section where you say "During this time, "studying" was mostly copying works." I think that's important information, but maybe say in a different way? V true though and I think you should still try to include it

Tone and Balance

 * Very well written and has great clarity.

Organization

 * I love the way you organized it! No critiques.

Media

 * Are you going to include some of the pictures used in the original article? But I think some of them, especially the ones of the 1000 and 1 nights, would be nice.

Overall Impressions

 * Overall, this is a great draft! I think with a few tweaks and a once over for grammatical things, this would be ready to publish. Great job!