User:McGlacklin/Pipil people/Arch.editr12 Peer Review

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The lead of this article is a little choppy, especially how the last sentence about cosmology is awkwardly tacked on at the end. I would recommend reviewing this and making it a bit more fluid. Adding some sort of timeline for when the Pipil people inhabited El Salvador as well as any relation they may have to modern indigenous or other groups could be a good place to start.

The body is split up into interesting sections, but it's a bit strange that the language, etymology etc section comes before the history section. I might suggest thinking about the order of the sections and how they flow as a reader. I would also clarify the difference between the terms Pipil and Nahua. They seem to be used interchangeably but have different meanings/connotations. I might clarify that either in the lead or history section. In the same vein as terminology, double checking if the plural of Nahua is Nahua or Nahuas.

I would include a citation or source that explains the use and creation of the term "mestizo". My understanding is that it's a newer academic term with older roots in the Spanish and indigenous languages.

I like all the ideas you have for adding an archaeology section. With the information about written language, you could think about folding that into the preexisting language section, or maybe dissolving that section into a new one with the archaeological evidence to back it up. On this note, keep in mind that there is a separate article about Pipil language and grammar, so the existing section, which is unusually large compared to the rest of the article, could probably be paired down anyways and replaced/supplemented with more prominent links to those articles.


 * Pipil language
 * Pipil grammar

In the Modern Nahua Culture Section, theres a comment about a post civil war resurgence of Nahua people (I think it uses the term identity?). Is this related to the Spanish conquest? Is it I'm not seeing anymore information about what this event and pattern is/was, so this could be a good place to expand more.

I like the infographic you mention adding, I think it will provide good context for the rest of the article. Were you planning to create this or have you found one that aligns with copyright?