User:McKennaKita/Sexual rites of passage/Masonsplace Peer Review

General info
McKennaKita
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:McKennaKita/Sexual rites of passage
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sexual rites of passage

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

- Consider finding more information to add to the "Sex training tests" section.

- Good grammatical edits.

- Finding more sources for other parts of the world could make the article feel more well rounded and fleshed out.

- I would make sure the citations are there to support information when you publish changes to article.