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Tupac Amaru II Page First Evaluation
After reading through the page, I would consider reorganizing the sections so that they are more clearly understood and their relation to the subject, Tupac Amaru II is more direct. To start, Early Life needs to be organized chronologically and only contain early life information or be renamed as more of a general biography sections. Sections that pertain to labor systems and Inca rebellions could also be their own Wiki pages. Without clear connections made between each historical event and the role Tupac Amaru II played in each, their purpose on this page is weak. The Aftermath, Death, Consequences, and Legacy sections could also be combined or modified in some way since they all aim at similar ideas of how Tupac Amaru II's death shaped later Latin American rebellions and led to the creation of him as a mythological figure mentioned in the beginning of the page. As for sources and citations, there are direct quotations where they are not needed and a few factual disputes on the talk page that make some sources seem incorrect. I would like to research those areas more, to gain a better understanding of where contributors to the page may have went wrong. There is definitely bias throughout, as Tupac Amaru II is portrayed as a strictly heroic figure. I am not sure what the general perception of his actions were in Peru, so that is another area of his life that I hope to research in greater depth.

First Draft Edits
The first section that I have decided to edit is the Early Life section. I found that most of the information within this section does not describe Tupac Amaru II's birth, upbringing, or early life as it should, but instead includes brief moments from his overall life history. In the hopes of making the content align more with the section title in a more organized way, I compiled information from the first chapter of a book titled José Gabriel Tupac Amaru Antes de su Rebelión. My first draft is as follows:

Túpac Amaru II was born in Surimana, Peru between the dates of March 8th and 24th, 1738. Shortly after his birth, Túpac Amaru II was baptized in his home and given the name José Gabriel — inspired by the male protector St. José and arcangel St. Gabriel. About 50 days later, on May 1st of the same year, Túpac Amaru II was officially blessed in a church in Tungasuca by Santiago José Lopez and granted as the legitimate son to Miguel Tupac Amaru and Maria Rosa Noguera, making him José Gabriel Condorcanqui Noguera. As he grew, Túpac Amaru II continued to live in the home where he was born. He enjoyed a playful childhood deeply influenced by his natural surroundings and outgoing persona. Along with other children in his community, he spent his time running through pastor land, collecting water, and harvesting plants. With age, this reality remained, as Túpac Amaru II spent a majority of his middle childhood enjoying the valleys, rivers, and caves that made up Surimana as well. His late childhood carried with it an opposing trend, bringing storms that flooded the streets and marked the sky with cracks of thunder and lightning. These bad times eventually passed, however, and days of both work and leisure returned. On these days of leisure, Túpac Amaru II typically accompanied his father Miguel Tupac Amaru — a leading Hatun Curaca of Surimana — to temple and community festivals, such as markets and parades. Fascinated by his father’s prestige and large following within the community, he often questioned why so many people surrendered to his power. At a young age, Túpac Amaru II learned that as a part of the Condorcanqui family he was a descendant of Inca Royalty, and for this, was given the name of his father, Túpac Amaru.

Draft for Peer Review
Changes made to Early Life section:

Túpac Amaru II was born in Surimana, Peru between the dates of March 8th and March 24th, 1738. Shortly after his birth, Túpac Amaru II was baptized in his home and given the name José Gabriel — inspired by the male protector St. José and Archangel St. Gabriel. On May 1st of the same year, Túpac Amaru II was officially blessed in a church in Tungasuca by Santiago José Lopez and granted as the legitimate son to Miguel Tupac Amaru and Maria Rosa Noguera, making him José Gabriel Condorcanqui Noguera. As he grew, Túpac Amaru II continued to live in the home where he was born. He enjoyed a playful childhood deeply influenced by his natural surroundings and outgoing persona. Along with other children in his community, he spent his time running through pastoral land, collecting water, and harvesting plants. As Túpac Amaru II grew, he spent a majority of his middle childhood enjoying the valleys, rivers, and caves that made up Surimana as well. Túpac Amaru II also frequently accompanied his father Miguel Tupac Amaru — a leading Hatun Curaca of Surimana — to temple and community festivals, such as markets and parades. Fascinated by his father’s prestige and large following within the community, he often questioned how he gained such a highly regarded social rank. At a young age, Túpac Amaru II learned that as a part of the Condorcanqui family he and his father were descendants of Inca Royalty, and for this, Túpac Amaru II was then given the name of his predecessors.

Mcadden (talk) 14:54, 8 March 2019 (UTC)

More Edits to Consider
Citations needed - After second sentence of intro - In death section - In consequence section

Improve Death section, add photo?

Combine Death, Aftermath, and Consequences

Are quotations from Tupac Amaru II or the poet listed under this section? Unsure of validity of Legacy section Mcadden (talk) 16:13, 12 April 2019 (UTC)