User:Mcartano/Cultivation theory/SpaceWax Peer Review

General info
Alabamagold, Celestialspring, Mcartano, Rossannm
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Mcartano/Cultivation theory
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Cultivation theory

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * There has been no changes to the lead section.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * The section on the magic bullet theory is a bit out of place. It should either be removed or have content added so it is relevant to cultivation theory. A discussion of the history of cultivation theory and what theories led to it may be appropriate. The second paragraph of the race and ethnicity section feels like a different theory. Elaboration is needed on how it connect to cultivation theory.
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * It appears to be up-to-date.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * It is missing the majority of the article. Explanation of the theory itself needs to be a priority.
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?
 * It touches on race briefly.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Yes.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * No.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Difficult to say since very little is present.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * No.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * No, more sources need to be added to the sections above the sandbox template.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * More sources are needed to properly cover the overarching themes of the theory.
 * Are the sources current?
 * Yes.
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
 * Yes.
 * Check a few links. Do they work?
 * Yes, however the reference section needs to be updated to be properly formatted. Any sources cited in the article should be added via the cite button so they are automatically added to the references.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * It's a little choppy, but overall fine.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * No.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * There are sections, however, there is content separate from the article section that needs to be moved into it. There shouldn't be writing above the sandbox page template.

Overall impressions
More content needs to be added, especially an overview of the theory itself. Continue to add more sources and properly format them in the citations.