User:Mcguirp/Music education/BSI26 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mcguirp


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mcguirp/Music_education?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

An opening paragraph that explains what music education is and that the article focuses on Latin America (with an explanation of Latin America or a link to the Latin America page) would make this article flow better and have a more clear understanding of the article right at the beginning. The article currently goes straight into an explanations of Aztec and Mayan culture. However, I think a more general introduction is needed prior to that.

 Content 


 * The title of the article is misleading. I was expecting to read about music education today. However, the article is more on the history of music education and focused on Latin America.
 * The title could be: ‘Music education in Latin America’. This way it is more clear when someone comes to the page during a search.
 * There is a good variety of information about the past and historical aspects of music education in Latin America.
 * Adding some information on which Latin American countries have music curriculums within their schools would be helpful. Comparing why some countries have music curriculums in schools and others don't would be interesting to read about.
 * Some current statistics about how many students pursue music as a career or for further educational studies in college or university could be helpful and interesting.


 * More information and expansion on the benefits of music education at the end of the article would add more value to the article. If there isn’t much information for the benefits of music education in Latin America, this section could be more general about the benefits of music education from a global perspective. The heading could be: ‘Benefits of music education - perspective from around the world’.

 Tone and Balance 


 * The article is very balanced. All statements are factual and informative.
 * There is no sense of opinion or assumptions within the article.
 * There does not seem to be any bias in the article.

 Sources and References 


 * A good amount of sources are used and they seem to be from a variety of sources.

 Organization 


 * Different headings could be used in the body of the article to separate the content. For example: ‘historical aspects of music education in Latin America’, ‘music education today in Latin America’, ‘music education in Indigenous cultures’, 'Benefits of music education', ' Music curriculums in Latin America'.
 * Separating with headings makes it easier for the reader to find the sections and topics within the article.

 Images and Media 


 * There are two images in the article. They seem to be fitting for the article and what the article is discussing. More closer images of specific instruments used in this time period (if available) could be helpful.
 * Include links to audio clips (if available) so the reader can hear the kind of music being discussed (rather than reading about it).

 Overall Impressions 


 * The article overall is written in a wiki style that is clear, concise and with factual statements
 * I think some sections could be expanded on to make the article more detailed and valuable to the reader. Sections that could be expanded: benefits of music education, and music curriculum within Latin America.