User:Mchoe1artic/Stephen Burks/Jalcar13 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mchoe1artic


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mchoe1artic/Stephen_Burks?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead section for the most part is great, you could probably leave off "He is the first African American to win the National Design Award for product design." and provide that information within the awards and honors section. The rest of the lead already succesfully provides a brief summary of the articles content.

Early life and education could probably use a few more details if you can find them, specify what degree was received or the years attended.

the content provided under career was easy to follow and the tone read neutral.

the only other suggestion is provide citations within the content. that's also something I missed.