User:Mcontris/Chunking (psychology)/VerdantAurum Peer Review

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VerdantAurum's Chunking (psychology) Peer Review[edit]
Hello Mcontris, I read your sandbox draft for chunking. Firstly, thank you for making your additions clear with bolded and underlined phases. Now onto my assessment of your article. I like how you modified the leading paragraph to include the benefits of chunking to the working memory. This change reflects the additions you have made to the article about the benefits of chunking to the working memory and lets future readers know that this information will be included in the article. Your writing appears to be unbiased, and the source you are using is recent and reliable. I feel that the phrase, "Remembering an entire chunk can also occur if one has stored the beginnings of a chunk in their working memory, resulting in the long-term memory recovering the remainder of the chunk," could be worded a tad more clearly. My recommendation would be, rather than a comma and then "resulting in," to either start a new sentence or turn the sentence into a compound sentence with two independent clauses instead of an independent and a dependent. Going forward, I also believe that a useful addition to your article would be to go into further detail about the benefits of chunking on the working memory, because, while you often state that there are benefits to the working memory, these benefits are never detailed in you editions.

VerdantAurum (talk) 03:39, 1 March 2021 (UTC)