User:Mcoope17/1138 Aleppo earthquake/Andrewyi17 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Mcoope17)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mcoope17/1138_Aleppo_earthquake?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * 1138 Aleppo earthquake

Evaluate the drafted changes
For the section of the effects of the earthquake, you should be specific with the cost of reconstruction instead of saying it was "high". I know it's just a draft, so I'm sure guys will change this section from bullets to sentence form. For the accuracy of records section, there is a small grammar mistake that can be fixed by rereading. There should be more clarity on the actual number of deaths and how they either aren't or are able to confirm them. I suggest adding more sections such as, damage/felt area, foreshocks(if there were any), and a general earthquake section that could explain the cause and time of day of the earthquake. For organization, the first section at the top should introduce the earthquake. Adding images/charts could help explain the felt area or the cause.

Alex's Response
On the cost of reconstruction due to the lack of historical records it's hard to say what actual cost of reconstruction was. There are no numbers in the sources that we found or were cited in the article that listed any monetary amount other than that it was "high". As the draft become more polished, more of the draft will become sentence form instead of bullets. We will try to add in images that are relevant to the subject and any charts if available. The idea of having the first section at the top makes sense and we will implement that in our future drafts. Thank you for reviewing our article.