User:Mcoope17/1138 Aleppo earthquake/Olivia-felton Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Mcoope17


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mcoope17/1138_Aleppo_earthquake?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * 1138 Aleppo earthquake

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I found the article mostly relevant, except for diving into the descriptive history behind the Aleppo earthquake. It pulled my focus from learning more about the hazardous earthquake. Overall, it seemed neutral. I'd discuss details about the missing information for example it never stated what magnitude Aleppo was which is an important factor. Another error I found, the author said historians support a 10 or 11 October date, yet doesn't specify. I noticed had to re-read that sentence, in my opinion I'd do more research to find out why that is because it's difficult to understand why the 11th is considered more "authoritative" versus the 10th. I agree, not all the links work for the citations however the ones that did supported the article. It is written from a non-bias perspective as you said. On your sandbox, I was able to open all the links and found them as good references.

Response to peer review
Thank you for your review it was very helpful. I will definitely look into some of the little details regarding the earthquake such as the magnitude and a more precise date. Also, we will consider taking away some details about the history of Aleppo and focusing more on the actual hazardous event. Finally, I agree the article is non-bias so we will keep it this way, and continue to find more credible sources.