User:Mcoope17/1138 Aleppo earthquake/Zoeroros Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mcoope17


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mcoope17/1138_Aleppo_earthquake?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * 1138 Aleppo earthquake

Evaluate the drafted changes
In the article it states "Turkey, a city European crusaders had built." I think this sentence may need to be reworded or corrected because Turkey is a country, not a city. Either way, the wording is confusing, so it would need to specify which city. I think the sentence structure and grammar of this article needs to be overlooked and polished. I also think that research could be done on how the infrastructure of the buildings in those cities impacted by that earthquake compare to those not affected by the Aleppo earthquake to see if any initiative was taken to prevent the collapse of so many of the same buildings. I think more pictures could be added of any trace of the earthquake's destruction from any of the cities listed in the article. I would also see if you can find any documentation of the magnitude of the earthquake. I see there is a map of the radius in which the earthquake reached. However, it would be helpful to have its magnitude as well to support the article's statements in how destructive it was.