User:Mcwillaa/Reproductive toxicity/Hart2me Peer Review

General info
Mcwillaa
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Mcwillaa/Reproductive toxicity:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Reproductive toxicity

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think the edits you have made thus far have been insightful and necessary additions! I am glad that you added information on the effects of lead on the female reproductive system, because right now this section of the article seems to imply adverse affects only for the male reproductive system. I think you introduced a structure in this section that could be applied to the following heavy metal sections as well. If enough data is available, I think it is a good idea to continue to add to how each exposure effects the female and male reproductive system. Specifically information is needed on this for the female reproductive system in the chromium section, as well as the male reproductive system in the mercury section. I also think it would be a great contribution to add information on the ways in which these exposures exist in an occupational setting, like you did for the section on lead.

Another small but helpful edit I think you could add would be to add a citation for the sentence in the section on lead that states a citation is needed. I also believe this article would benefit from adding a citation to the first couple sentences of the Effects section, as there appears to be no citation until the second paragraph.

I am not sure what else you have planned for your draft, but I think an interesting section to add would be information on the incidence and prevalence of these exposures and outcomes. I found this article that might be interesting to look at. It is a review of reproductive toxic agents and their outcomes in Korea, and it has some tables and statistics that might be helpful.

Reproductive toxic agents in work environments and related cases in Korea https://pubmed.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/31914717/ doi: 10.12701/yujm.2019.00416

Overall, you have made a great start to your article! This is an interesting topic and I am looking forward to see what else you add.