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In Pathophysiology section under Water Aspiration:

“Of people who have survived drowning, almost one third will experience complications such as acute lung injury (ALI) or acute respiratory distress syndrome (ARDS). ALI/ARDS can be triggered by pneumonia, sepsis and water aspiration and are life-threatening disorders that can result in death if not treated promptly. During drowning, aspirated water enters the lung tissues, causes a reduction in alveolar surfactant, obstructs ventilation and triggers a release of inflammatory mediators which ultimately results in hypoxia. Once someone has reached definitive care, supportive care strategies such as mechanical ventilation can help to reduce the complications of ALI/ARDS. ” I would remove the third and fourth paragraphs where the page mentions the differences between fresh and salt water drowning and I would insert the following:

“Whether a person drowns in fresh water versus salt water makes no difference in the respiratory management or the outcome of the person. People who drown in fresh water may experience worse hypoxemia early in their treatment, however, this initial difference is short-lived and the management of both fresh water and salt water drowning is essentially the same. ”

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Thanks for sharing your proposed changes. Please use "people" instead of patients as per WP:MEDMOS. Can you add wikilinks in? They are appropriate the first time the word is presented in the Wikipedia article. I added one as an example.