User:Meabarbedoreggina/News media/Sofhiac12 Peer Review

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Meabarbedoreggina


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 * Talk:News media

Evaluate the drafted changes
After going through your potential contribution to the Wikipedia page, you did great overall. The section that you added is relevant to the topic and is straight to the point. All the sources that you used seem to be reliable and you are not bias. I do have a few recommendations on how you can improve your paragraph. After every sentence, make sure to add a space between the reference number and the end of the sentence. I also feel like your sentences seem to be repetitive so maybe try switching up the words you use. For example, instead of saying "News that is seen or read in newspapers and news magazines can be heard on the radio. News that is on the radio is also on television, as they have the same channels in common." You can say something like; "The radio provides similar content that is provided on newspapers and television. News that is talked about in television is also on radio stations because they have some channels in common."