User:Med20a/Social cognitive theory/GS214 Peer Review

General info
Med20a, Jtm20dc, and Haleymackinnon
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Med20a/Social cognitive theory
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists) Social cognitive theory

Evaluate the drafted changes
From what I could see, there is no lead section, but I believe that is because you're only editing a section of the article right now. That being said, I would just make sure that you have a lead section prepared/revised when you make your final changes and publish, as the lead section is really important to establish the topic of your article.

The first two paragraphs within the Sandbox draft seem very similar to the original article, which makes me believe you are keeping the majority of those two original paragraphs and adding some adjustments to them. The proposed changes you have listed on this page sound good and I think that they will add a lot to the history section, especially regarding the proposal of recent findings in this section. I think a recent findings addition would be incredibly helpful for the content of this page. I like the added overview section. I believe that the behavioral factors outlined are important to the subject of social cognitive theory. I think expanding more on this and the proposed changes that are also in your sandbox draft will create a great update of this page.

From what I could interpret, the content added into the draft is balanced. The only thing I think that could be added would a citation to the behavioral factors section. While this information is very important when understanding social cognitive theory, there is no citation to back up the information that was added. A citation will make the information credible. There is a references section at the bottom of the page, which makes me think there is a source for this information, that it just needs to be referenced in the overview paragraph. There are some links within the references section, yet they are not "clickable," so I'd reenter those citations to ensure that the sources are accessible to viewers who want to look at the references.

I really like how you've set up the organization of the article. I think progressing from the history of Social Cognitive Theory into the overview of the theory itself makes logical sense. I think once the proposed information at the bottom of the page is added, then a fuller encompassment of the theory will be communicated very effectively. From what I can tell, there are no grammatical errors within this draft. In the proposed changes at the bottom of the page, it says that a rework of the first paragraph needs to be done. I believe reworking some of the sentences within the first paragraph will be beneficial in ensuring the topic is being communicated effectively.

Currently, there are no images or media in the draft or in the article. I think that adding some media or images would look good in the article.

Overall, I think you have a great start to your article. I believe the new section added about behavioral factors will add to the content of the preexisting article very well. With the proposed changes at the bottom of your page implemented, I believe you will make a very great update to this current article!