User:MedLife4/Internalized racism/Vre99 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

MedLife4


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:MedLife4/Internalized_racism?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Internalized racism
 * Internalized racism

Evaluate the drafted changes
The first thing I noticed was that I was able to locate the reference easily, which I think is great for the reader so that they are able to fact check the information in the article without struggling to find the source. Next, I noticed that in the “in education” section “predominantly” was spelt “predominately.” I honestly had to look this up and I discovered that both are correct spellings, but it kind of threw me off because the spelling that was used is less common. I am unsure if this is something worth changing or not, because both are correct spellings, but I just wanted to bring that to your attention in case it was something you wanted to change or if you prefer the less common spelling. I love the section that you have chosen to edit because diversity in education is so important. I think this subtopic fits into this article very well, because internalized racism is everywhere, including classrooms and workplaces. When I was applying for graduate school, they made it clear how important diversity is to them. If more schools will focus on diversity so that minority students do not feel alienated, we will have a much happier and healthier education system in my opinion. I think you did a great job with this section, but is there anyway you could provide more information? I know that Wikipedia is not meant to dive deeply into subtopics, but I feel this section needs more information so that the reader can understand just how important and serious it is to have a diverse classroom and/or workplace. Is there maybe a way to discuss ways to incorporate the history of minorities origins in the classroom or workplace? What would incorporating this do for minority students? Would it make them feel more significant and recognized? What would the benefits be for the mental well being of minorities? These are just questions I have when reading this article. Overall, I think the information you added did enhance this article, but I feel like you gave us a crumb of a cookie instead of the whole cookie. You left us wanting more.