User:Medicalendeavor/Blueberry muffin baby/Rebjmcd Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Medicalendeavor


 * Link to draft you're reviewing: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Medicalendeavor/Blueberry_muffin_baby?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): Blueberry muffin baby
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): Blueberry muffin baby

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I think Medicalendeavor has made their edits on the page itself, rather than transferring from sandbox to live article, though I'm not sure.

The lead gives a nice overview of "Blueberry muffin baby" etiology in name. Perhaps the lead could have summary sentences for diagnosis, prognosis, and treatment. A sentence each could be beneficial as quick overview for the lead section. The picture in the info box is great. Personal preference: add a period to the caption.

Pathophys section: This is a helpful section to have. It may be helpful to internally link "hematopoiesis" to its page, in case readers are unaware of what hematopoiesis is. Similarly, linking macules and papules could be beneficial as well.

Causes section: The causes section is very well organized. Again, I think incorporating internal links to the respective pages would be helpful. I really like the breakdown of causes.

Diagnosis section: At first, I thought this section was too long. However, I appreciate the summarized examples of diagnostic conditions for various causes. It was not too overwhelming. Again, incorporating links will be helpful.

Prognosis section: Well done. I don't have suggestions for this section.

Treatment section: Well done Concise. I really liked this section and feel it represents Wikipedia and its goals well.

References: Strong references.

Overall, a great job. Main takeaways: incorporate links and provide sentence for each article section in lead. Rebjmcd (talk) 19:20, 15 November 2021 (UTC)