User:Medley3636/Attentional control/Bibliography

Bibliography below.

Outline of proposed changes
ARTICLE PLAN

Elderly Section


 * Add 3 secondary sources
 * Add why elderly people have decreased attentional control, which occurs due to the reduced weight of the brain
 * Add a secondary source to explain at what age brain weight loss occurs and why (white and gray matter)
 * Implement a secondary source that explains what white and gray matter are
 * Use a secondary source that adds one way to prevent the loss of brain volume, such as physical activity

Relevance to Mental Illness

First paragraph: Second paragraph:
 * Take out the word 'also' a few times because the original article repeats it about every sentence
 * The phrase 'low attentional control' is repeated numerous times, so swap it out with 'weak attentional control'
 * In the middle of the first paragraph, change the neutral/encyclopedic tone and grammar in two instances
 * reword the sentence that says "developing a psychopathology"
 * reword "Researchers are also suggesting others in the field use..."


 * Add 3 secondary sources
 * Add the acronym for PTSD
 * Retrieve a statistic from a secondary source that points out how many people with PTSD experience reduced attentional control
 * Implement a secondary source that expands on why patients with PTSD have low attentional control and how it's triggered by emotional cues
 * Report how attentional control is linked to cognitive processes
 * Add a third secondary source that talks about some possible treatments used to increase attentional control (yoga and meditation)