User:Meegleague/Kamares ware/Epichippo Peer Review

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 * Kamares ware

Evaluate the drafted changes
The Lead Section

I think the lead is good! The only I have this is somewhat nitpicky is to get a little bit more straight to the point. It does have a hollistic representation of what the item is, but it might be nice to have a starting sentence at the very beginning to say what it is in laments terms that is quick and easy to read!

Clarity of Article Structure

I really like how the article structure is based on the periods of how the pottery evolved. It might be nice to add brief sections on the artistic iconography to showcase its importance as well as having a section for its specific use. This is seen in the lead briefly but it might be nice to get into more detail. I do love the gallery portion because it shows the variation!

Coverage Balance

Overall, the balance of coverage is pretty good. I would re-iterate what I said in the previous section, that there could definitely be more added but I think it would make it more well rounded for the overall object through adding more sections that go into more detail about the significance of the artwork as well as its function and use.

Content Neutrality

The content neutrality is good! I liked the specific wording like "it was interpreted to be a prestigious artifact " rather than it just saying something like "it was a prestige artifact". There are some parts that have a little bit of a bias like in the Middle Minoan period IIA it said, "...ware reached its great sophistication," and Middle Minoan period IIIA, "While the high quality pottery is still being produced in abundance, the artistic decoration is no longer considered a priority." I would try to find a source that says that or reword it in a more neutral way.

Sources

The sources all seem very vetted and distinct! There's also a good amount across the board with the amount of information that was given. I would add a couple more for the parts that I mentioned above.