User:MegMarie13/Advocates for Youth/Paisleysierra Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

MegMarie13


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Advocates for Youth


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that overall your article is well written and stays pretty neutral throughout and I really like the external links you put in for terms that are important to know for the article. I think that you can potentially add any current activism that the group/organization is doing now, if they are doing anything. Even any movements that they support or adding on more to their mission would work if you could. I'm assuming you're not fully finished with your article, but I could be wrong. There are certain points in the article that I think could use a little more substance if you have the information to do so, but if there isn't enough information on the topic then it makes sense. The mission and vision portion of your article could use some more description as to "what 28 states are obligated to teach about sex ed and HIV. (Or even including an external link to it if possible) The policies portion I think you could expand a little more about the policies that the group disagreed with and if you can find any more of those policies, but you might've tried that already. I think that you did an excellent job for your article, keep up the awesome work.