User:Megan808/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Hana, Hawaii

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose it because it is the ʻāina (land) that I am from and my preliminary impression of the article was that it includes a lot of statistical figures that are very informative.

Evaluate the article
Lead section: First sentence clearly states that Hāna is a CDP place on the island of Maui. It is clear and concise that this is neither person, event or anything else. Although it does not introduce the articles major sections, the hyperlinked table of contents followed the four sentenced introduction.

Content: The two of the three first sections; Geography and Climate as well as Demographics were done pretty well. They were filled with accurate statistics, many hyperlinks and references and they are temporarily the most up-to-date information. On March 21, 2021 when the 2020 census results are released, this information will then be outdated. I was quite dissatisfied with the first section called History, because there is so much History in and about Hāna and I felt like it not only stayed on the surface level, but didnʻt mention anything of importance towards the Hawaiian centric viewpoint but rather "this year the Hana highway was built" and "that year an inn which is now the Hāna hotel Travassa was built" rather than previous Aliʻi, battles, moʻolelo of this place and more was missing. As for the Points of Interest and Healthcare I thought were so, so; like it could be done a bit better but it was decent. The Popular Culture and Economy sections I felt were very awkward how they threw in a one sentence description for each. Lastly, the Notable Residents and Gallery were both lackluster in content. Similar to the History section, the Notable Residents lacked representation of notable Kanaka Maoli with the exception of Queen Kaʻahumanu and instead have representation of "notable" American former celebrities whom decided to live out some of their later days in life in Hāna. And lastly on the articles current content, the gallery has a total of three photos to show an 11.7 square mile space designated as "Hāna."

Missing content: A section that I believe would contribute to the Kanaka representation of this page would be similar to the "Points of Interest" section but a section on either 1. previous ʻahupuaʻa land divisions &/or 2. current Hāna subsection divisions. Ideally the section would include a short description of each place but lead to another article that describes each individual place. Although Hāna is representative of the whole East side of the island, there is a clear distinction with their own history, moʻolelo, notable figure and families, makani, ua and more.

Tone and balance: Although the authors did not obviously actively push a euro-centric viewpoint which obviously marginalized Kanaka Maoli, it was done through a lack of representation of Hawaiian History, Hawaiian figures and Hawaiian ideologies which serves as a sense of culture/population erasure.

Sources and references: With nine sections, it would seem that there would be a plethora of references, however there are only 11 and they mostly reference statistics. I do however appreciate that there are many working hyperlinks to additional information within each section. There are scholarly articles, historical books and historical documents that could be cited in order to expand this page. Additionally, this page does not have a talk page.

Overall impression: Upon reading it the first time, all I noticed was a bunch of stats I didnʻt know and thought it was pretty awesome to learn about but through the re-read I noticed all the missing info, euro-centric mindsets of the authors and lack of representation of all things Hawaiian.