User:Meganyeh/Immigration/CooperR.Anthony Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Meganyeh


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Meganyeh/Immigration?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Immigration

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that the lead provides an exact description on what the added content will focus on, which is obviously relevant to the article. If the second half of the added content is going to be placed in a different section than “Law and ethics,” I would suggest adding that to the lead.

I think that the content added is very relevant to the topic, being that immigration as discussed in the article is an international movement. Therefore, international laws that effect immigration is definitely a relevant component to the topic. The content briefly touches upon the current international functions that impacts immigration laws without getting too specific, which I think is a good way to summarize all of the different policies that are detailed in the existing Laws and ethics section.

The content seems very neutral being that most of the content is direct statements relating to the topic. None of the claims appear biased and the claims are supported by factual evidence or current sources.

The organization of your content is set up very well. I think that the sections on the UK and Canada would fit more in the section on discrimination being that your writing focuses on the political and economic obstacles that are causing immigrants to struggle in their efforts for rights. The writing itself is easy to read and flows nicely. Always check grammar.

Overall, I think that the content you are planning to add to the article will help further develop the information that is already provided. I think that the section on international law is a great addition, and adding further research behind the discrimination and difficulties that immigrants face in different parts of the world are extremely in line with the existing article.