User:Meghanherlitzka/Haloquadratum walsbyi/Secretly a power ranger 2 Peer Review

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Meghanherlitzka


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 * Haloquadratum walsbyi

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Based on the sources used in the bibliography, I can see that there are a variety of pieces of information that can be included from each of them. There is one that covers a specific point which will allow the editor to expand on that specific topic to better help the reader understand the point being made, and then the other two sources, are able to help expand on the entire topic as they appear to cover the topic with more depth than the aforementioned source. Based on the sources, I am very interested in seeing how this topic is expound upon.

I really enjoy the way the introductory paragraph was written. It wasn't too formal at all. It was very light and informative without shoving the information in my face. The set up for separation of information definitely aides in the flow of the introduction.

The current pictures are nice! The placement of the green one was done very well but the placement of the other two is a little off putting. They are very close together and they are not centered in the article. Maybe they can be split up into different sections and used to help elaborate on different parts of the article more.

It is clear that the article is still in its very early stages as there are not many sections of information at all. Even with that regard, there is still room for a lot of good information based on my review of the sources from the bibliography. They have all also been published or written within the last two decades so they are appropriate sources for information.

After looking at the article, it does give a neutral base which is good. It is not trying to persuade me to believe anything about the topic.

I found nothing distracting regarding the information in the article which is very helpful, except that maybe the header "description" needs to be moved or renamed.

This article is very early in its editing stages so I am sure the finalized product will be very good!