User:Megluther/Breanne McGhee/ACapper Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Megluther


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Megluther/Breanne_McGhee?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A (article does not already exist)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

Your lead is great! Looking at the first line, one link you could add is for "clinical adjunct." Off the top of my head, I'm not quite sure exactly what a clinical adjunct is and it might be helpful to have a link here to its definition if possible. One other small edit is to change "diversity INTO the field..." to "diversity IN the field..." to be a bit more succinct. Also, one thing I learned recently is that you can add links to terms in Wikipedia without there being a Wikipedia article associated with it; for example, "E.Y.E.S....." could link to the organization's website for further reading. I also love all the information and links you included in your infobox!! Also, for adding an image to the infobox, I was able to credit Dr. Danielson's image to The Seattle Times (the photographer was listed), and since it was a news source, you can use these images under copyright as long as you are not re-distributing them as your own work. Here's the image upload wizard: https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/Special:UploadWizard and a helpful article about adding images to infoboxes: Help:Infobox picture. Let me know if I can help in any way!

Content

Wow, Dr. McGhee is amazing! One quick suggestion I have is to talk more about what community she serves in Louisiana through E.Y.E.S and maybe add a statistic or something about the impacts her organization has made (if that's available in a source somewhere). Another organization suggestion I have here is to potentially combine the "awards" and "selected publications" sections together, since the awards section is smaller. But either way works fine! One other thing you can do is (in editing mode) click on the image of Jefferson Hall and use the corners to drag the image so that it's larger on the page!

Tone and Balance

You did a fantastic job on maintaining a neutral, informative tone in your article (which must be especially difficult with someone whose done so many amazing things in her career)!! No suggestions to make here :)

Sources and References

Lots of varied sources here! Just taking a brief initial look at your sources shows that Dr. McGhee is more than worthy of a Wikipedia article, and has done a ton of notable work in her field! The only suggestion I have here for adding in links is to add a link to the E.Y.E.S. official website if there is one!

Grammar/Edits

"Selected publications" --> "McGhee has had various works..." --> "Dr. McGhee has contributed to and published various works in her field..."

Also, adding "Dr." to McGhee's name once you're talking about her career!

Fantastic job on your article, you did a great job and I'm sure Dr. McGhee will love it! :)