User:Megreed7/Brown spider monkey/Sjwagne1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Megreed7


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Megreed7/Brown_spider_monkey?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Brown spider monkey

Evaluate the drafted changes
General Comments :

Good additions to the conservation section. For the sentence "Conservation efforts are being made by trying to alleviate the detrimental effects a fragmented landscape has on the brown spider monkey population", reword the beginning because it is kind of confusing. Maybe say "Conservation efforts such as alleviating the detrimental effects of fragmented landscapes on the brown spider monkey population are being pursued." I think the additions to this section add valuable information to the conservation section of the article.

Future Improvement Ideas:

I think the sentences using the new references can be expanded on. Potentially add more information about corridors and population loss. You could potentially add information about the conservation efforts to the Lead section. I think there is potential for adding links to other articles for the information you added. For example a link to a page on corridors and the inter-Andean forest.

Additional Resource:

https://www.iucn.nl/en/news/protecting-the-critically-endangered-brown-spider-monkey/

- Talks about some conservation efforts for brown spider monkey

https://link.springer.com/chapter/10.1007/978-3-031-11736-7_7

- Talks about community efforts for corridors for primates based on South American studies. May be useful for expanding on corridor information.