User:Mel6930/Judge Bernadette D'Souza/Amulumudi Peer Review

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Mel6930
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 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mel6930/Judge_Bernadette_D%27Souza?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
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Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead: I would love to see a longer lead section with an info box! I think it would be helpful to summarize her career and use the lead section as a justification to whoever's reading it as to why she is a noteable judge who deserves to be remembered. Love the picture!

Content: I really like your early life and education section! It gives a really great understanding of why she wanted to go into law in the first place. Great legal career section and I like how you added a photo of the law school. Your civil district court service section is fantastic and explained why her appointment was so noteable. I really like your professional associations page as well

In the early life and education section, you need to add a comma in the 4th sentence after "1978".

Tone/Balance: Overall, you remain unbiased throughout your article and the tone is very consistent.