User:Melanieeeedawson/Lipstick feminism/TherealHarv Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Melanieeeedawson


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Melanieeeedawson/Lipstick feminism
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lipstick feminism

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Looks like no changes were applied to the actual article yet, which I thought was part of the instructions for the assignment, but it seems like it might not have been.

Lead has had small edits nothing changing much, it remains clear and easy to understand, but a bit more background was added along with another citation in the first paragraph. There is a nice sort of description of what is present in the article but the lead also feels like its to heavy with information the more one reads.

Content is up to date as far as I can tell and it is relevant to the topic. Some of the proposed changes wanting to be made are hard to visualize without the rest of the context around the sentence. The topic does very good at staying unbiased and having a neutral tone throughout the article. The section about language being expanded is a very good edit, explaining the words and how they are applied makes it easier for the reader to understand why the word was used in the way it was and why they have to be reclaimed. There are a ton of good citations being added with all this information they look to be current, diverse and are clearly reflected in the paper when cited. Links work and the articles look to be peer reviewed and from journals.

Overall the content being added is clear and easy to understand, the edits with be very beneficial to the article as a whole, I do not see any errors in the content being added, looks to be well organized and has great potential. There does look like there is a section that was meant to be edited but was skipped or wasn't deleted.