User:Melendb/Alfonso I d'Este, Duke of Ferrara/Glo2022 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Melendb
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Melendb/sandbox

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? The Lead is the Lead from the original article.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes, the content added is relevant to the topic. The "Early Years" section, as well as the addition in the "Art" section, provide better insight into who Alfonso was and how he wanted others to perceive him.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Yes, the source cited was published in 2005.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? In the original article, in the "Biography" section, it seems there is too much focus on Ferrante and Giulio. While the story of the two is interesting, they are not the primary figures of this article and this section strays away from Alfonso. I think this portion could be consolidated and doesn't need to continue after the mention of the death sentence being commuted to life-long imprisonment (i.e., you can remove the part starting with "They were led away...").
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? I don't think so, but this can always be added.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? Yes.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No, everything seems objective and highly factual. As of now, the additions are endowing the original article with information about Alfonso more so than providing a certain scholarly argument or claim.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? The part about Ferrante and Giulio seems overrepresented to me.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No, everything remains neutral.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Yes. There is one reference so far, but no citations.  I assume the reference section will come to include other sources and citations will be inserted later.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? No, because right now there is only one source.
 * Are the sources current? Yes, the source used for the additions was published in 2005.
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible? Not right now.
 * Check a few links. Do they work? Yes, the link works!

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? There is one really minor error, but it can be easily fixed. The sentence currently reads: "They characterized him as an unrefined and rude."
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Yes. I also think the few sentences added to the "Bibliography" section read really well, contain critical information, and serve as a good transition between the opening sentence of that paragraph and the later part.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? Yes, the article is definitely more complete. The "Early Years" addition is important for crafting a more robust understanding of Alfonso's character, which was inevitably informed by his upbringing and status.  As I said above, the sentences added in the "Bibliography" section are valuable because they show Alfonso's own self-image or self-fashioning.  He obviously had a specific standard for how he should be depicted, and this standard reveals the complex social dynamics which he navigated and harnessed in order to preserve power.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? The content added provides greater insight into Alfonso's life and the way he used art as a tool for maintaining social stratification (most importantly, the way he figured into the social strata).
 * How can the content added be improved? I think the article could benefit from a lengthier exploration of Alfonso's relationship with art and art collecting. Since he was such a well-regarded patron of the arts, there might be more information about the types of pieces he commissioned. Did he have a gallery/collection where he housed all of his works?  What kind of art did he prefer? Did he use art for diplomatic purposes?