User:Melikajvn/Nuclear magnetic resonance spectroscopy/Audiolosh Peer Review

General info
Melikajvn, Xavier1191
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Melikajvn/Nuclear magnetic resonance spectroscopy - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Nuclear magnetic resonance spectroscopy - Wikipedia
 * Nuclear magnetic resonance spectroscopy - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

- no lead since adding on to original wiki page

Content

- The content added about NMR in the first two paragraphs are good

- It adds additional content not yet on the original wiki page

- However, I feel like you go too much into depth on EWG and EDG and ortho para positions since this kind of strays away from your topic of NMR.

- Instead of writing so much on EWD and EDG I recommend liking other wiki pages such as Electrophilic aromatic directing groups - Wikipedia or Electron-withdrawing group - Wikipedia

Tone and balance

- Overall good neutral tone which matches Wikipedia guidelines

Sources and references

- There are no sources currently in the sandbox

- All information should have sources from literature sources (secondary or primary)

Organization

- Hard to comment on organization since it is a continuation off a paragraph on the current article.

- the first paragraph can be split up into two paragraphs just to make it a little more organized and easier to read

- may also be a good idea to indent the equations

Images

- They are good for talking about EWG and EDG and ortho para positions

- If added to wikipedia should later be made in ChemDraw

Typographical errors

- $$(\Delta peak \; hieght )(Frquency\;of\;the\;NMR\;spectrometer)=J\;Coupling$$

https://wikimedia.org/api/rest_v1/media/math/render/svg/3dc9d2d70a4687ce459dd05144c6f4a47222195e - here just "Frequency"

- "This movement of electron density is due to the structure using resonance."

- This sentence is kind of odd, perhaps "The change in electron density is due to resonance"?

Overall impressions:

- Overall good additions to be added on the original NMR page is present

- The first two paragraphs definitely show provide more detail than present on the current article

- Sources are needed still to be referenced

- Some parts are unneeded (ie. extra detail about EWG and EDG)