User:Melinasr/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Blue Qur'an

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I learned about the existence of the Blue Qur'an in Fall 2020 during a discussion about calligraphy as art in my Arabic class. I chose to evaluate it after seeing how inactive edits have been in recent years and because of the unusual tone and structure used in the lead section.

Evaluate the article
I think this is a good start to the article, but it needs some refinement to best showcase the beauty, history, and controversy surrounding the Blue Qur'an. Here are my suggestions.


 * The lead section could be reorganized to prioritize its importance in the world of Islamic calligraphy, then could go into the controversy surrounding its dating/origin.
 * Move everything after the first comma somewhere else basically!
 * The tone of the paper is a little too informal, and it presents information in a way that suggests they are opinions or unsupported facts.
 * A lot of this comes from the use of "many people", "some researchers", "it is possible"
 * We should tighten up the sentence structure, use more definitive vocabulary, and reference more sources surrounding controversies or debated facts
 * The history and form sections often reference similar things, so we need to create a much clearer divide between them
 * Maybe we could put form first? This will help us streamline the history section
 * The references need to be cleaned up, especially those surrounding the Blue Qur'an in 21st century auctions. Some, like this Sotheby's article, are out of date and from unreliable sources.
 * Small thing, but we should probably mention how most of the manuscript has been lost, and the rest divided.