User:MeloVeiss/Tailenders (2009)/Wikiedits32 Peer Review

== NOTE FROM COURSE INSTRUCTOR: I agree with this really thorough and thoughtful review. Some great suggestions here for continued improvements. Not sure if you can make the changes in terms of sections on production, etc. but adding the links for actor names and other associated pages will be helpful to making the page more relevant in the Wikipedia search results and browsing. ==


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Peer Review
The lead section is pretty good. Though brief, it tells the reader the article is about an original video animation, what studio produced it, and when and where it premiered. For those who may not be familiar with the concept of original video animation, I think linking the "Original video animation" Wikipedia article to your article could help improve it. To wikilink an article, all you have to do is highlight the text you want to link the article to, hit the chainlink symbol, and the wikilink for it will automatically appear.

The plot section gives a nice overview of Tailenders, but I think it could use some more depth. Currently, it reads like a strong synopsis. I would recommend keeping what you've written, but put it under a synopsis section instead. A synopsis section is good to include because it gives the reader a general idea of what the anime is about before going into the plot. The plot section doesn't have to be very long or over detailed, but it usually gives a broad scene-to-scene breakdown. If it helps, you can break it into however many acts it has, and summarize what happens in each act. Providing readers with a brief definition of what a terraformer would also help improve your article. I don't know if you thought about adding sections for Tailenders' production, release, and reception, but I think these sections are necessary to include eventually.

The table, listing the cast and the characters they play, is nice. I would recommend linking the cast members' names to their Wikipedia articles if they have one. I know Wataru Hatano has one. I would also recommend giving each character, especially the main characters, a brief description - only including important and relevant information. Other than that, you're off to a great start! The article is well-organized, well-formatted, and the layout is looking good. I know you said you can't add images until after the article is published, so I have nothing to say about that. The tone is neutral. There's no biased language that I could find. The language you do use is clear, concise, and easy to read. Your citations and references look correct. Unfortunately, I am unable to click on them to check them out, but they do seem to adhere to Wikipedia's Notability requirements. Last thing, don't forget to complete your bibliography page.