User:Melodynanfito/sandbox

Peer review feedback
March 31, 2018

I received my feedback on D2L instead of on Wiki, so that is why it is not seen here. I have decided to expand the Maori influence section, like the feedback suggested, and perhaps implement a sociolinguistics section. I will add citations to the article as well. These elements should make a strong article. Peer review Hi Melody, I am not sure where to find your draft. What I did as a peer review a couple weeks I'm not sure if I did it correctly. I do appreciate your comments in my sandbox. I am scanning the article and talk page of New Zealand English. I can't find work from you except in your sandbox, which is fine, I just don't know if I am missing something in the article/talk page of N.Z. English. The Maori section is not well-structured and is a good choice for improvement. I am not sure if you have done this yet, but asking a wiki professional, in this case, Shalor with wiki-ed, is very helpful. The Maori section certainly could use some sources and the paragraph structure of the article needs work. As I said, I did a peer review previously, I don't feel I did it right, although Mr. Cotter tells me I did. I would like to see a draft of what you are working on. I am going to work on my California article right now. Cheers!Jason Hall UA (talk) 22:04, 1 April 2018 (UTC)

Article draft II
March 25, 2018

This is what I would appreciate receiving feedback on.

Like I theaid last week, I will be adding ciperhaps implement a sociolinguistics section, as well as just adding citations.These improvements could make a strong article. tations to sentences/claims that need them within the New Zealand English article. I have also decided to try to expand the section of Maori influence on the dialects if I can continue to find credible sources online. While the article talks about the different dialects in New Zealand, it does not talk about how they are viewed in society i.e. if some dialects are more "sophisticated" and vice versa. Depending on the research that is unearthed, I will try to implement a section on sociolinguistics if people on the Talk page agree that is a path that could be explored. I welcome all constructive criticisms on these ideas. I would like to know which ideas to expand upon and implement within the article.

Article draft ideas
March 18, 2018

The article I will be improving upon is New Zealand English. While there aren't any glaringly obvious errors on this page, there are some corrections to be made. The aspect I will be improving upon the most involves citations. A lot of the statements on the page are not backed up by concrete evidence or even basic articles. There are truly too many to list right now, but my improvements will be shown in Week 11 when the draft comes together. I may add to the article famous New Zealanders with strong dialects, but I will have to ask the talk page in advance--especially because I do not know if they would agree with me on adding that information. I could also add more slang to the page that New Zealanders use.

Article evaluation
February 22, 2018

I chose this article because I am from California myself and wanted to see what the online encyclopedia (and world) had to say about the dialect there. The article matched fairly well with its title. While it had discussion about the vowel sounds and pronunciations, I expected that to be what the whole entry was about. Instead, there was also discussion about the specific words used in California, such as slang words used for talking about the freeway. The article was admirably neutral. It stated facts and dates/timeframes without being biased towards any one group or area mentioned. While I was expecting more talk about the specific Valley Girl accent, I was pleasantly surprised to find both NorCal and SoCal were equally represented in the article. The links throughout the post are valid and work well. This was helpful when I wasn't sure what something was that was mentioned. Most every one of the links was one for another wiki page. One of the links was a little biased to me because it boasted about how great this area is and its rating as a vacation destination. My article's Talk page was actually really funny because there were disputes about if the article should be called "California English" or "Californian English." They disputed and then even nominated a move, which then resulted in the decision to not move it. It was all very amusing. Clearly, people really do care about the names and content of these articles. The article is closely tied to our 383 linguistics class because it read a lot about the vowel pronunciations and dialect of Californians. In my opinion, Wiki gives a very unbiased, clear, concise summary of this topic. This is opposite to how some articles we read in class are because normally those are quite biased.

Hello Melodynanfito, I am a classmate from ANTH 383. There were two main reasons I chose to do a peer review on your work. First you are caught up and seem to be ahead of the game, I feel a lot of us are not (I am not). Also you evaluated California English, which is my main article. The Californian/California thing on the talk made me laugh also. I thought Californian sounded obviously wrong. I wanted to review your addition to New Zealand English, but I could not find it. It is possible you are not signing your additions. I also may not be looking hard enough. Perhaps they were removed, or perhaps I don't understand how to correctly read the page showing what we have all done. There are no links in this sandbox, but this is just an evaluation so that is fine. Reading your sandbox here actually will help me with my article. The New Zealand English page seems to have more content than California English. It is hard to do a peer review on a sandbox, but I will say your sandbox is much more organized than mine. Inland/coastal California accent splits are more pronounced than northern/southern California, if my research is correct (though the wikipage is missing this). On the wikipage Chicano English is discussed, Spanglish is not (outside of a link). I was also expecting more discussion of ValleySpeak/Surfer dialect. I have never lived in California but feel that the stereotypical valley/surfer dialect is not as common as media would have us believe. The talk page on California English did not generally speak with as much praise for the page as you did, I felt the article was lacking in areas. It needs work, but is well done as far as what is in there.Jason Hall UA (talk) 02:41, 19 March 2018 (UTC)