User:Melvinpritchett/Box jellyfish/Ladyoflorien75 Peer Review

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Melvinpritchett
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In the last paragraph under Detection, the sentence "Given the results, the presence or absence of the box jellyfish can be indicated through the matching of genetic material, and if a match is found, then the box jellyfish was present in the area, additionally, the quantity of genetic material can indicate the biomass or abundance of the box jellyfish in the given sampling site" is a run-on sentence. I would break up the sentence into two sentences, like: "Given the results, the presence or absence of the box jellyfish can be indicated through the matching of genetic material, and, if a match is found, then the box jellyfish was present in the area." "Additionally, the quantity of genetic material can indicate the biomass or abundance of the box jellyfish in the given sampling site". The last sentence under the Detection section should read more like "The utilization of eDNA can provide a cost-effective and efficient way to monitor populations of box jellyfish in both medusa and polyp life stages, and then the data is used to help understand more about their ecology and limit the effects on coastal anthropogenic activities." In your first section under distribution, I think you mean "Indian Ocean" rather than "Indindia Ocean". In your section about reproduction, it might be helpful to explain what euryteles and isorhizas are. Also do away with the semicolon and just say "Hours after fertilization, the female releases an embryo strand that contains its own nematocytes-both euryteles and isorhizas" for grammatical correctness. In the next sentence,"cnideria" should be spelled "cnidaria". In the second paragraph about reproduction, what do you mean when you refer to "the medusa species"? Is there a specific species that is named medusa, or are multiple species considered to be medusoid? Also, the first sentence of the second paragraph should read "It was previously believed..." for grammatical clarity. that sentence should also probably read: "It was previously believed that medusa species only reproduce once in their life before dying a few weeks later, exemplifying a semelparity lifestyle." rather than just having a comma and a run-on sentence. The caption "Box jellyfish species Chiropsalmus quadrumanus; contradict the belief that Cubozoas are semelparity" should not have a semicolon. It should read something like "Box jellyfish species Chiropsalmus quadrumanus contradict the belief that Cubozoas live a life of semelparity." For your "Reproduction" article, I'm not sure if you can cite a header; I would just check up one that. The article sounds straightforward overall, but I would just watch out for any grammatical errors, as they can be distracting to the reader. Some of this article sounds disjointed; the writing styles sound very different in different sections. I would recommend trying to go through and compare the different voices in each section and making things sound more unified. I would also watch the organization of your page as a whole-there was no "lead" article or "body" section. While I was reading, I got confused as to what was added by your group and what was already present.