User:Memphis2027/Deaf President Now/Triplejump35 Peer Review

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Memphis2027 and Wildpanda1
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There is a very big section of updated a new information added into the sandbox. The information does seem to be relevant and very fitting for the page but there is a lack of sources added to the paragraphs.

The sources that I did see were up to date. The latest one dating back to 2001. I feel like the is relevant enough considering the fact that the event happened in the 1980s.

The added information holds a neutral tone and does a great job at explaining the events. I admire the tone of the added paragraph. They are very well written and add a great deal of information to the page.

The new paragraphs do have one or less source added which is a bit problematic. There should be more than one source that is somewhere within the paragraph and not just at the end. The paragraphs without sources should at least include a repeated source within the text.

The new edits are concise and they are very easy to read and they sum up the main ideas very well. The minor edits also do a good job at making the page easier to read.

I do think that the content overall will add value to the existing article. I do think that there needs to be more sources added to back up the information without a citation. Overall, the information was great and only did good things to the page!

Grammar Edits:

Throughout Gallaudet’s history, the Deaf community has always felt more or less unsatisfied with the Deaf representation within the faculty. Prior to 1980, there hadn't been any Deaf chief academic officer or president. A significant push for a Deaf president, however, came when Jerry C. Lee, who had been president since 1984, resigned in 1987. An argument against a deaf president ensued due to the fact that there was no "sufficiently well-trained deaf people."  In the months following Lee’s resignation, Gallaudet's Board of Trustees looked at candidates for the next president; during this time, several organizations campaigned for a Deaf president. These organizations wrote letters to the board recommending qualified deaf candidates and reached out to the media to gain support. People such as Vice-President George H. W. Bush and Senators Bob Dole, Bob Graham, Tom Harkin, and Lowell Weicker wrote letters of endorsement for the cause. Efforts during this time were unsuccessful in garnering a powerful and unified student backing for a Deaf president.

Both Elisabeth Zinser and Jill Spilman wanted nothing to do with the protests. They were both pictured alone, with one another, or with an interpreter. Neither Spilman nor Zinser knew sign language. There is an image of Zinser signing 'I love you', one of the very few learned signs. This image is important because she wasn't signing it to anyone within a conversation, instead she was using it more as a symbol. The pictures of Spilman and Zinser being alone go against the unified front the protesters made. It is thought that Deaf President Now gained so much acceptance from everyone, ranging from the media to the public, due to the idea of standing with disabled communities within a nondisabled society.

DPN had a lifelong effect on the Deaf community such as a great deal of new bills and laws that were established that helped further deaf and other disabled people’s rights. DPN also allowed for better rights and gave more access for deaf people when compared to the previous 216 years of the nation’s existence. This also eventually led to being protected from being wrongfully terminated at their place of employment and other acts of discrimination based on the basis of their hearing status.