User:Menaqui/Fitness culture/Purplejedi Peer Review

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Menaqui


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 * Fitness culture


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Lead Section
The lead sentence is very well put together and concise. It gives the reader an exact idea of what the page is about. The problem with this section is that it should lead into the next sections. It should give the reader a small idea about what is in the article. The lead section should have mentioned what was coming next but instead there are statistics about fitness that probably should have been put either in another section or in a section all by itself.

Content
The content does seem to be relevant to the topic but could easily stray from the main topic. The first section is called “development” when it should really say “history” as this section gives a brief history of fitness throughout the ages. There is also a huge gap in the history of fitness. It jumps from ancient Greece to the nineteenth century. What about all the time in between? Fitness didn’t disappear for thousands of years. While it is nice to see it in the see also section it  would also be great to add something about women in the gym to this article as fitness culture for women is completely different from that of men.

Tone and Balance
The tone of the content does seem to be neutral as in there is no bias but there is a heft to the influences section about social media. There is no attempt to sway the user one way or another.

Sources and References
The references do seem to reflect what is in the article but there does seem to be an article that is published by a magazine. This could be a problem as magazines tend to be biased and not always be factual. This is a reference that should be replaced. The sources seem to be up to date with some from as close as 2020 and from the ones I check are still working links, There is probably a lot of better sources with better research to back the information that is used in this article. There is a lot more research to do.

Organization
While the information is in a way well organized it does seem almost in disarray as if not much thought went into the plan of how these sections were going to be written and ordered.

Images and Media
In the entirety of the article there are only two pictures at the top of the page. It would greatly assist and enhance the article to have at least one if not, two pictures with each section. There easily could have been a picture for each one of the time periods showing people working out. Or having a picture of a personal trainer helping a guest or a picture of an example of sport fashion.

Overall Impressions
The article is not a bad one. It definitely needs help. It could be better organized, content gaps need to be filled in, and more pictures need to be added to the sections to help with the information being given.